The way you described the cat in the first two lines were good, it was not confusing for me to figure out what you were describing. Although, I believe you need to use more punctuations and details. I got lost in the poem a couple of times, from lack of commas. You should go back and places commas as needed. One thing I find unique about this poem, is the form and structure, is there a reason you choice to format your poem in this manner? It is important for you to know the reason you make certain decisions in your poems, because some readers may think it is done on purpose and would want to know the essence of the idea.
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